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Vball Chickie1624
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116
New York

0 posted 2000-05-18 09:49 PM

How do you love someone when you've never even met them?

You love their smile, when you've never seen it.
You love their laugh, when you've never even heard.
You love the way their eyes sparkle them.
You love the way just the thought of them puts a smile on your face.

The way you can tell them anything and they listen.
The way it doesn't matter how they look in person, because you've already fallen for them.

When you finally meet them, you were right all along.
You do love their smile, their laugh, and the way their eyes sparkle.
You do love them no matter how they look in person.

But until you meet them, it's all a dream.
A dream that will come true when they say they love you too.

 "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do."

"The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say."
- Anais Nin

"Follow your own heart, not others."

© Copyright 2000 Danielle DuFour - All Rights Reserved
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119

1 posted 2000-05-18 11:23 PM

How about "Unseen Dream" or something like that. I like this... internet love seems to be a popular topic here...


 "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller.
"But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin."
"In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy."
"Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World"

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since 2000-05-17
Posts 15
2 posted 2000-05-18 11:28 PM

Great Poem! How about  "Unseen Love" .  youre like me have had internet relationships, unfortunately mine live to far away except for one but that seems to be over before it started.
New Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 1
naples fl
3 posted 2000-05-19 02:05 AM

This poem was intersting. I like the fact that this poem is about something that truly dose happen in realy life but the poem seems more like a letter than a real poem to me.

since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
4 posted 2000-05-19 02:10 AM

Hey Chickie,

First a quick word of caution: Internet love is of a more dangerous sort than the standard methods, because you never really meant them, all you know of them is the facade presented by thier words.  And you never see thier eyes, you can learn alot about a person the way thier eyes move. much for quick!

Great poem...hmmm...a title...hows about Distant Eyes?  Umm, sorry i not even good at titling my own poetry (:

brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
5 posted 2000-05-20 04:23 PM

I agree with Deranger, you have to be careful with who you meet on the internet and what you tell them. I really liked your poem.
This is my first time, in this part of the site. Not being a teenager anymore  
ah I am only 20, so I guess I can still get away with acting young and reckless

as for a poem title, "Premonition of Love"

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