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since 2000-05-12
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0 posted 2000-05-13 09:49 PM

His voice is so beautiful
His hands are so strong
They are the hands that can hold the bonds of love
The moments we have to just sit and talk
are the moments I treasure forever and long
When his hand brushes mine
or he touches my face
It gives me a feeling to make my heart race
Another day passes and i see him from afar
to see his hand brushing another girls arm
When i see them together it breaks my heart
But i can't explain why im so hurt
I want him to be happy and enjoy his live
If only i could show him i want him in my life.

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since 2000-05-10
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1 posted 2000-05-14 12:05 PM

Welcome to passions Kristen1016!

Yeah, i can relate, all too well to that feelling of sh*t, but stunning poem! I (and the rest of the forum, whenever they get back from whatever they doing) cant wait to see more of your work

This is weird, normally, you would have gotten many more reply, much sooner, but this forum is in a sort of rut, but please dont let thi discourage you from future posts.


Lucius Cade
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235
2 posted 2000-05-14 04:31 AM

Aye I understand your words perfectly. Indeed this forum is short of people at the moment so things are moving a bit slower. Thats why I am here and not at the forum I used to be. I cant wait to see many more of your works.

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

Vball Chickie1624
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116
New York
3 posted 2000-05-15 08:18 PM

I poem I can very much relate to.  Very well written, good job.  

- Danielle

 "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do."
- Anonymous

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4 posted 2000-05-15 09:55 PM

Ah, I know a lot about loving from afar. I can relate to this poem very well. It was well-written. Welcome to Passions! Check your e-mail for a special message, and I'll be looking for more of your work around here soon!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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