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Teen Poetry #2

a moment to reflect

brendon2k
Junior Member

since 2000-05-11

Posts 38
none

0 posted 2000-05-11 05:57 PM

minutes pass,
but time passes much to slowly,
but if i stop and think,
these weeks have gone by much to fast,
the time we had together,
a feeling of being lost,
try to be found,
but still i'm lost forever,
now hours pass,
yet i'm not sure if time really matters,
everyone asks whats wrong,
yet i still know that i dont matter,
it's dark inside this room,
the lights are on,
yet i cant see beyond this pain,
the pain you left with me,
ever since the day i said,
that this could never be,
months have passed,
i dont want to be with you,
i've put you in my past,
for love is fun,
but it never lasts,
it's been only minutes since i left you,
it's been only minutes that i've looked at you,
it's time to look at myself,
but how come everytime,
everytime these minutes pass,
i know i take this much to fast.

tawny
Junior Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 14

1 posted 2000-05-11 06:04 PM

interesting.. makes you take a second look, but i don't seem to understand the last line about taking things too fast... can't really see how it relates after all this talk about going slowly in time.
but good work, anyways

Lucius Cade
Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 235
Saskatchewan

2 posted 2000-05-11 06:04 PM

wow, these lines caught me off guard.

"it's dark inside this room,
the lights are on,
yet i cant see beyond this pain,"

I love the way you put that, it gives a different perspective on the poem.

Lucidity is the answer to all problems

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

3 posted 2000-05-11 06:47 PM

Hey dude,

Another great poem! i do not mean to belittle your situation, but trust me, these things happen... It makes you stronger. Someday you will find happyness and thank all these girls that made you what you are.

If you want to talk, you have my email address, feel free.

[This message has been edited by Deranger (edited 05-12-2000).]

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