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the dark angel
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since 2000-05-10
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0 posted 2000-05-11 03:07 PM

What would happen
if I died?
Would the world stop?
Or would anyone even realise?
Would the days pass by
as though I was alive
or would they take a moment from time
to say their goodbyes?

But I guess I'd know
if I died
How good my friends were
and if they cried
when they learned I had died
some would care
and some would not
but I care
because I don't wanna be forgot

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1 posted 2000-05-11 03:29 PM

Someone would care if you died, that's for sure. There's always someone that cares, and you would not be forgotten. Good writing.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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2 posted 2000-05-11 05:57 PM

something we all think about but rarely say. well put, to the point.

know that someone will always be there to remember

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3 posted 2000-05-11 06:08 PM

WOW!   that was a very intense poem!   i liked it lotz! Even though it was very heart breaking!!! <3 Ya know i think everyone wonders about that! i know i do!   but even though it may seem like no one cares someone does!   just remember this saying!
* Someone somewhere dreams of your  
and the though of u makes their life when u feel all lonely and blue
remember someone somewhere is thinking of you!!!* that is so true!!!

*smile always* it makes ya feel better*



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4 posted 2000-05-11 06:18 PM

Very good poem, you express the thoughts of many. I liked how you worded it, and i can relate to it. Excellent poem!
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5 posted 2000-05-11 10:04 PM

Beautiful, but depressing.  Well said, but harsh-heard.  

Just remember that there are many people that count on you, wether you know it or not, plenty of these people you haven't met yet, pontetial friends, lovers, you name it.  This is your life, cherish it, its the only one you get.

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6 posted 2000-05-12 02:20 AM

This is a question everyone ponders in their life, you have put it into some great words dark angel.

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

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7 posted 2000-05-12 12:41 PM

Wow nice poem it hard to think about not everyone rembering you but live life as if it were your last day
good writing keep it up!!!

 Lane C.

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