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You're a Pain in the Arse (a love poem) :)
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You're a Pain in the Arse (a love poem) :) |
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HCwildchild Member
since 1999-09-03
Posts 55Pennsylvania,USA |
I wrote this poem after talking with my boyfriend,(who is now my fiance),and it is written from his point of view. When he said I was a pain in the arse, I was surprised at first, but then I understood what he meant and the idea for this poem came about  enjoy!You're always running around my head, I can never get to sleep. I toss and turn all night in bed, With the thoughts of you I keep. You make a tough man wanna cry. You drive me out of my mind. I wanna live, but I feel I could die, Help me leave the pain behind. I love you so much, I think I'm obsessed. I can't feel your touch, But you got me possessed. I'm not complainin, cause you are my star, But I can't help sayin, You're a pain in the arse. I say that I love you, I say that I care, I only think of you, I just wish I was there. You feel my pain love, I just wish you could see, These tears that I shed love are for you and me. I love you so much, I think I'm obsessed. I can't feel your touch, But you got me possessed. I'm not complainin, Cause you are my star, But I can't help sayin You're a pain in the arse. Heather C. |
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Frosty Junior Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 17 |
This one is cute. And you sticked with the rhyme scheme all the way through. That is something I rarely see anymore. Then again, every time I see a consistent rhyme scheme it is usually forced, this one isn't, it flows well. Cute. Good writing |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Lay shock and amaze! A poem thats NOT depressing! Even though, as a guy, i normally exempt "Cute" from my working vocab, i shall make a exception. Wow, this is cute. My lack of sanity aside, this was a nice and amussing poem, it IS what i feel like sometimes... Err, good luck with that whole fiance thing! |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
LOL! This is great. Very very sweet, and although 'a pain in the arse' is not what I would usually use to describe the love of my life, I know exactly what you mean. ...Daysleeper... "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller. "But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin." "In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy." "Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World" |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Lol...this is sweet and I love the sense of humor in it. Thanks for sharing! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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HCwildchild Member
since 1999-09-03
Posts 55Pennsylvania,USA |
hehe thanx for the nice replies everybody It was meant to be funny so I'm glad that ya liked it hehe and now that he and I are able to be together, its not a ''pain in the arse'' anymore Heather C. |
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the dark angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 37 |
your poem rocked! I know the feeling! trust me! keep up the fabby writing! the dark angel -x- |
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