Teen Poetry #2 |
Is it true? |
JennyeMeshan Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 103Cecil, Wisconsin USA |
Remember what happened?, Remember how it felt?, I was crushed to see, You in that squad car, I told you I cared, I told you I'd miss you, You said the same, But is it true? I was at the dance, I saw your friend, He said you still had feelings, I fell in love with someone else, I couldn't wait for you, I thought you blamed me, I'm so confused, So is it true? I'm stupid to talk to the wind, Waiting for your answer, I don't like mind games, Your friends play with me, I wish you could tell me yourself, You aren't allowed to communicate, But why not when it's necessary? TELL ME TELL ME IS IT TRUE? DO YOU SECRETLY LOVE ME? -JennyeMeshan (information of this poem's background will not be released...sowwy people.!) "If thou can wait then thou shall stay" -Destiny's Child |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
The words in this piece are good, but the way it's put together doesn't really FLOW. I hope everything works out for you the way you;d like it to...if this person is really in jail, why can't they communicate? Not even through letters? If they won't write you, then you should write them. IF they don't respond, then that's your answer: No. If they do, then you make up your mind, and decide whether they're worth the wait. OR you can do what you want, and then be with them> this person should understand that you are in a very tough predicament. I don't know what else to tell you in the ADVICE dept. Chin up & good luck hon! (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Tell me, is it true? are we two, or are we through? Tell me, is it me? are we to be, or are we history? Tell me, as you leave should i believe, or just grieve? Tell me, are we past? going to fast, will it last? Tell me, just a word, life so blurred, from what i've heard Tell me, is it true, feeling blue, cause i'm losing you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ JM, enjoyed your poem~~~ A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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JennyeMeshan Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 103Cecil, Wisconsin USA |
I wish I could say something that would tell you about this peice. Maybe someday "If thou can wait then thou shall stay" -Destiny's Child |
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snowgirl17 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 20Cloquet,Mn |
I totaly dissagree with the above coment aboutit not flowing some of myfavorite poems are choppy and not all thought out so keep it up poter is all about thoughts on to paper |
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