I Think I Died Today" which is better?

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I Think I Died Today" which is better?

Powder
Junior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 20
Illinois, USA

0 posted 2000-04-29 08:26 PM

I Think I Died Today

I gave up who I was today,
It seemed I sold my soul.
I tried to be like Them today,
I turned my heart to coal.
There seemed no other way,
I think I died today.

I tried to hard to change today,
I showed that I was weak.
I gave Them what they want today,
It hurt to be a freak.
There seemed no other way,
I think I died today.

I tried to be popular today,
So I out my dreams away.
There seemed no other way,
I think I died today.

or:

I Think I Died Today

I gave Them what they want today,
It seemed I sold my soul.
I tried to be like Them today,
I turned my heart to coal.
There seemed no other way,
I think I died today.

I tried to hard to change today,
I showed that I was weak.
I gave up who I was today,
So as not to be a freak.
There seemed no other way,
I think I died today.

I tried to be popular today,
So put my dreams away.
There seemed no other way,
I think I died today.

Any ideas would be a great help!

Olga
Member

since 1999-07-26

Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA

1 posted 2000-04-29 09:03 PM

i liked the 2nd one betta. If its only one thing i can tell u is to neva try to change who u are, and that theres no such thing as a freak.

**Angel**
Member

since 2000-03-31

Posts 162

2 posted 2000-04-30 11:59 AM

I sorta like the 2nd one better too.
I agree with Olga...don't change yourself for other people. You are special just the way you are.

I like your poetry!

**Angel**
Member

since 2000-03-31

Posts 162

3 posted 2000-04-30 11:59 AM

Oh yes I forgot....

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