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sKiTtLeS Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 113wisconsin, u.s.a. |
The deep dark shadows of your mind, teasing me. Taunting me. Confusing my emotions. Wondering what you're thinking, whether or not you believe the words coming out of your mouth. Wanting to trust you. Wanting you to heal my broken heart. But further you let my heart crumble. Further it tears. Bleeding with the innocence of my existence. Torn apart by tainted trust... sKiTtLeS~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
So much emotion in so very few words....this is excellent!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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son of man Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125 |
lots of emotion relays a powerful sense of doubt and disappointment, which i am very familliar with, as surely most are. i enjoyed this work. |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
i think the whole tearing at the innocence of a heart that trusted is pretty emotional!! great piece....like Lizzie said....you have relayed so much raw human emotion into so few words excellent job Bec  i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known? i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all i took my time, i hurried up the choice was mine i didn't think enough I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone I never conquered, rarely came 16 just held such better days Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside The world was wide, too late to try The tour was over i'd survived I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again You'll close it off, board it up Remember the time i spilled the cup Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault I never conquered, rarely came But tomorrow holds such better days Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside The world was wide, the time goes by The tour is over, i've survived I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone 'Adam's Song' Blink 182 |
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sKiTtLeS Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 113wisconsin, u.s.a. |
this *was* written at a very emotional time in my life, but it's the writing that makes me feel better thanks to all for the wonderful replies sKiTtLeS~ |
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