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To You, From Me :) |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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Only with you I feel so wanted Only with you I feel like a star When I'm all crumbled You build me up When I am overwhelmed You forgive everything I scream out loud As I break in half Then you make me laugh And it's all I can do Only with you The sun rises and sets All the day long You spell your name And I've been thinking If you really love me You might be part of me Maybe we'll fly so far away I scream out loud As I break in half Then you make me laugh And it's all I can do This is all I can do What would you have me do? Only with you I find it only in you....... *tag, you're it!* *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~~nice writing~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~tag~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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UndyingLove Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 23Bethany, OK, USA |
Great job! I really like it. |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
you know what i really like about this poem?? i love how you have a repition of 'as i break in half, then you make me laugh" i think it works really feel...it adds a lot of emphasis  great job Bec i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known? i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all i took my time, i hurried up the choice was mine i didn't think enough I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone I never conquered, rarely came 16 just held such better days Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside The world was wide, too late to try The tour was over i'd survived I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again You'll close it off, board it up Remember the time i spilled the cup Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault I never conquered, rarely came But tomorrow holds such better days Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside The world was wide, the time goes by The tour is over, i've survived I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone 'Adam's Song' Blink 182 |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
oops...that is spose to say....'it works really well' not 'it works really feel'  my stupid wording ability lol |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey ya'll, thanx for replying. I wrote this last year when I was al "happy" with my then-boyfriend, thinking stupidly that we would last <ha! highschool relationships lasting? right> Anyway, I thought it was funny how I've changed my perspective on the subject since, but I still like this poem. It makes me laugh. Once again, thanks to all!  *~Meredith~* *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a neat poem! I guess everyone believes their high school relationship will be the first to last...until it ends! I am not speaking from experience..I've yet to encounter first love but I do speak from quiet observation! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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bulletproof2312 Junior Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 28Beaumont Tx, 77707 |
hey Mer, wouldn't it be nice to get back to that feeling? ... Niffty poem.... *SMILES* "Here I stand I can do none other"---Luther |
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son of man Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125 |
i feel ya. good job! |
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