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since 2000-04-13
Posts 44

0 posted 2000-04-27 12:26 PM

There is this amazing feeling
everytime you walk in the door.
My heart drops to my knees,
then plummets through the floor.

There is no word for what I feel.
I can't even begin to describe it.
You belong in my life, my world.
In your arms I perfectly fit.

There is only one thing I hate.
And that is the word "Goodbye."
You say it when I need you most
and this I wonder why.

You leave me when I need a hug,
a kiss, a warm embrace.
You leave me with your gentle smile
that lights up your whole face.

I hate the fact you have to leave,
I won't get to see you any more.
But I know I'll get that same ol' feeling
next time you walk in the door.

(I wrote this for the love of my life.  Everytime I see his smiling face he makes the clouds in my life disappear.  I don't know what I'd do without him.)

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son of man
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125

1 posted 2000-04-27 03:46 AM


i get it.
feelings that strong huh?
well, i feel ya.
great poem!

Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-04-27 07:58 AM

I deleted the other copies of this poem as you requested in your e-mail.

I know this is a quiche but it is also very true. Tis better to have loved and lost then to never have loved at all. You now know the feeling and you never may come back to you in time. Hang on to the happy memories for they will see you through.  

Well done.

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-04-27 10:37 AM

Rachel8383, this is nice writing.  Good use of rhyme~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~well done~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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