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since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~

0 posted 2000-04-26 12:49 PM

Why are you so blind?
Why can't you just see?
You make me cry and feel so bad
Why are you doing this to me?

You have put me in a bind
Where I am captured and can't get out
You make me oh so mad
Why can't you remember what I am all about?

My soul remembers your feel
But the feeling in my heart is such,
That even though I despair
I miss your soft and gentle touch
Even now, this pain is so real
I release you on the wings of a dove
I am so hurt and my heart cries
Just remember you were my first love

***Thanks again Maitay & Majestic!!!

"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

© Copyright 2000 Stephani Ann - All Rights Reserved
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
1 posted 2000-04-26 01:44 AM

Very lovely poem. Makes me sad tho, just the thought of lossing my love saddens me.... Ah, but that is rude to say. It is a very nice poem, well written, nice flow. Heehee, and a very popular topic with me right now (love poems have been almost ALL I've done). Anyway, keep up the good work.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost

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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
2 posted 2000-04-26 03:16 AM

This is a sad but lovely poem (if that makes any sense). It was nicely written and you have described the emotions well.


[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 04-26-2000).]

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-04-27 10:42 AM

~~~~~~~nice writing~~~~~~~~
you have a talented pen

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

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