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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Take me by the hand show me why your still here; why you left me in the sand. Take away my fear. Basking in pale moon light; clouds cover the night; I see eyes shining bright as i fall out of sight. Show my heart why you dropped it on the floor. I thought I would die as you walked out the door. I hear what you say when i'm far away; But I must tell you this way; Pour toujours je vous aime Written by: Hoppy 4-23-00 There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant Don't worry about people stealing your ideas. If your ideas are any good, you'll have to ram them down people's throats. -- Howard Aiken |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This is an excellent piece of work Hoppy, it has a lot of emotions in it. However I did get a little confused with the line "Take me by the hand...show me why you're still here" then the rest of the poem goes on to say that he/she left you heart broken. Maybe I didn't understand it correctly. Love Always, Shell |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Very emotional poem, Hoppy. I love the use of French at the end...nice touch! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
hmmm, I like it very much, but what does that last line mean? I don't speak french. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. Some say the world will end in fire, Some say in ice From what I've tasted of desire, I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great, And would suffice. -Robert Frost |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
WONDERFUL! thats all i could say about this poem |
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luvable New Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 9 |
I think this is a great poem! I hope you keep up the good work! |
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