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since 2000-01-27
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0 posted 2000-04-23 12:17 PM

Take me by the hand
show me why your still here;
why you left me in the sand.
Take away my fear.

Basking in pale moon light;
clouds cover the night;
I see eyes shining bright
as i fall out of sight.

Show my heart why
you dropped it on the floor.
I thought I would die
as you walked out the door.

I hear what you say
when i'm far away;
But I must tell you this way;
Pour toujours je vous aime

Written by: Hoppy

 There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

Don't worry about people stealing your ideas. If your ideas are any good, you'll have to ram them down people's throats.
-- Howard Aiken

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since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
1 posted 2000-04-23 01:28 AM

This is an excellent piece of work Hoppy, it has a lot of emotions in it.  However I did get a little confused with the line  "Take me by the me why you're still here"  then the rest of the poem goes on to say that he/she left you heart broken.  Maybe I didn't understand it correctly.

Love Always,

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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-04-23 03:44 AM

Very emotional poem, Hoppy. I love the use of French at the end...nice touch!

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
3 posted 2000-04-23 05:07 AM

hmmm, I like it very much, but what does that last line mean? I don't speak french.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost

since 1999-07-26
Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA
4 posted 2000-04-24 09:25 PM

WONDERFUL! thats all i could say about this poem
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since 2000-04-20
Posts 9

5 posted 2000-04-25 03:07 PM

I think this is a great poem! I hope you keep up the good work!
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