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The moon has spilled the silver flour...
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The moon has spilled the silver flour... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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The moon has spilled the silver flour The pale clouds grimly sneezed Late August, covered up in mist Arose from sleep before the cock Could publicize the needed hour. Two ashen birches in a twist Shook off the ravens and the flock Arose from branches with a holler. And sultry rays, sprung up askew Reflecting off the morning puddles. The grass would gather into huddles To share the sacred drops of dew. All was awake and only you Were still in slumber. Two small shoes Lied carelessly below your bed. And to this day, I still regret Not waking you to see the splendor. I let you sleep, my precious muse, And now in sadness of September There’s nothing there to reproduce. "I will not whole die, my soul in sacred lyre, will outlive my dust and will escape decay, And in the moonlit sphere, my glory will not tire As long as poets still remain" A. Pushkin |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
I like the descriptive words. The explaination of the whole setting is good. Nice job. Isa  |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Mmm.. that is nice.. hey, can I ask you a question? Y do u use "Lied" instead of laid? is there particulat circumstances to use one or the other? Or.. just either? Lynne |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Isabelle, glad you liked it. Yu Lan, I really don't know when to use which, I just feel it as I write... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I really like this piece. It is quite descriptive and you have expressed the emotions well. Once again great work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you anonymousfemale! Glad you liked it! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I like this one too. Your use of imagery was great, I could see it all happening!! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
I really like this poem! It is great. The expression in it is so vivid. Thanks Lindsay |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you everyone for your nice comments. I'm glad that so many people enjoyed this one! |
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