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0 posted 2000-04-15 12:23 PM

sickeningly calm,
she looks up at me mockingly,
daring me,
daring me to give into her,
so inviting,
the smell of this powerfull mistress hits my nostrils like a hammer,
taken many lives,
luring them with her promises,
she whispers to me,
i can hear her over the agonizing pain in my head,
standing there in my innocense,
she taunts me,
and my mind,
lite now,
begins to drift,
and i fall into her awaiting arms,
enveloping me now,
filling my every thought with her,
i lay there dead,

 nat<~~~~funny girl

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since 2000-04-12
Posts 113
wisconsin, u.s.a.
1 posted 2000-04-15 12:36 PM

I really like this one. Strong, and to the point. Descriptions are very good too.


 "Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."
-the words of a friend

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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-04-16 03:29 AM

This is a very good poem...very vivid and descriptive...I hope you don't feel like that now though...I hope you never have to feel like death is the only way out. Turn to someone first. You can overcome anything!

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

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