navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #2 » Love hurts and Break-ups stink
Teen Poetry #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic Love hurts and Break-ups stink Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 18

0 posted 2000-04-12 08:43 PM

~Hello to all the new poets out there! I haven't submitted anything for quite sometime but, it's so cool to see so many new people and old ones as well writing. I love reading new work and I hope you enjoy mine as well. Take care and thank you so much for taking the time and reading this poem~

I once thought I loved you, I knew it was true
How was it possible to show I loved you
At the sea you were Beautiful, a reflection in the sun
So many of the ripples you were never just one

At dusk you came out and painted the sky
So natural and graceful there was no need to try
The motions of your hands provided a breeze
So peaceful and calm through the leafy palm trees

Your eyes sparkled through the reflection in the sand
Your body had more curves than that of the land
Your laugh was heard through the waves crashing on the shore
For you and for me all I wanted was more

One day your warm sun hid behind a dark cloud
One day the waves crashing stopped being so loud
Springtime in Nature, Winter out here
I stepped outside only to feel your tear

Your tears fell on my face making it wet
I waited that day but there was no sunset
There was no calm breeze, just the air in its flow
At night no stars and no elegant moonglow

The once blue sky was so dark and so gray
My world is so lonely since you went away
Every leaf on the ground that falls from a tree
Is blown away in the wind like your memories of me

You played with the stars in my universe
And it is for you that I write this last verse
When you were with me, nothing else mattered
But no thoughts of you now with a heart that is shattered

 Seth Madden

© Copyright 2000 Seth T Madden - All Rights Reserved
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-13 08:41 AM

This is a beautiful and sad poem. I hope you post your work here more often cos I like it!

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
2 posted 2000-04-14 01:43 AM

this is a lovely piece of work, Madden.. it is spellbinding.. I think your descriptions of the sky.. sea.. everything.. fit perfectly..    

Is that the title? "Love hurts and break-ups stink" ?? It does not quite seem to fit with the beauty of the poem.. but.. your choice anyway... ^_^

Well, I will read any of your work u post.. this is just.. magical.. :>

[This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 04-14-2000).]

since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

3 posted 2000-04-14 05:57 AM

this is such a beautiful poem.....your descriptive writing was so effective....this is truly very impressive!!

waiting to read more of your work


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #2 » Love hurts and Break-ups stink

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary