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Love hurts and Break-ups stink
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Love hurts and Break-ups stink |
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Madden18 Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 18Connecticut |
~Hello to all the new poets out there! I haven't submitted anything for quite sometime but, it's so cool to see so many new people and old ones as well writing. I love reading new work and I hope you enjoy mine as well. Take care and thank you so much for taking the time and reading this poem~ I once thought I loved you, I knew it was true How was it possible to show I loved you At the sea you were Beautiful, a reflection in the sun So many of the ripples you were never just one At dusk you came out and painted the sky So natural and graceful there was no need to try The motions of your hands provided a breeze So peaceful and calm through the leafy palm trees Your eyes sparkled through the reflection in the sand Your body had more curves than that of the land Your laugh was heard through the waves crashing on the shore For you and for me all I wanted was more One day your warm sun hid behind a dark cloud One day the waves crashing stopped being so loud Springtime in Nature, Winter out here I stepped outside only to feel your tear Your tears fell on my face making it wet I waited that day but there was no sunset There was no calm breeze, just the air in its flow At night no stars and no elegant moonglow The once blue sky was so dark and so gray My world is so lonely since you went away Every leaf on the ground that falls from a tree Is blown away in the wind like your memories of me You played with the stars in my universe And it is for you that I write this last verse When you were with me, nothing else mattered But no thoughts of you now with a heart that is shattered Seth Madden |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a beautiful and sad poem. I hope you post your work here more often cos I like it! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
this is a lovely piece of work, Madden.. it is spellbinding.. I think your descriptions of the sky.. sea.. everything.. fit perfectly.. Is that the title? "Love hurts and break-ups stink" ?? It does not quite seem to fit with the beauty of the poem.. but.. your choice anyway... ^_^ Well, I will read any of your work u post.. this is just.. magical.. :> [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 04-14-2000).] |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
this is such a beautiful poem.....your descriptive writing was so effective....this is truly very impressive!! waiting to read more of your work Bec |
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