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Lonely Poet New Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 3California |
Shadows Shadows are all around us Surrounding us with fear Driving people crazy Bringing people tears Shadows lurking all about Without words the shadows shout In the night the shadows play Shadows are present In night or day Shadows follow us around They are cast upon the ground In the darkness evil lurks Shadows follow Every move and jerk From within the shadows cry From their birth they never die |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
this one was very nicely done. The flow at the beginning of this was excellent. I tripped a couple of times from the middle to the end. On the whole a wonderful job. |
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JEBE Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 32WILMINGTON, NC, USA |
VERY COOL SUBJECT...THE ONLY PART OF THE POEM THAT TRIPS THE RHYTHM IS "IN NIGHT OR DAY" I WOULD JUST TAKE OUT THE "IN" AND "EVERY MOVE AND JERK" BUT OVERALL GOOD JOB...  |
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