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since 2000-01-31
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0 posted 2000-04-10 03:44 AM

Hi All...Its been so long..
Lingering around that dark deathly dungeon I call my life,
I find myself staring into its vivid merciless colours,
Colours of my happiness and sadness , my truths and lies,
Each beckons me towards its reality,
For each twisted fate of mine is meant to be,
Hate and love is what every human breeds,
But still, I back away,scared and unsure,
Call me  the faithless one!
Shout inside my soul my hellish sins!
I am much too aware yet blind to everything else,
I nurture inside myself the shallow conceit of this horrid world,
As it tries to blacken out each colour which links me to them,
Playing with MY toys now , this life has stolen away my hope,
As slowly I see this endless cave vomit out fire and blood,
Time closes its door one last time, giving way to its cruel Gods,
And all is gone , the climax now slowly floating at the  edge of my muddy grave,
Dead and insane , the climax of my being there and then slowly letting go!
One season of hate was enough to trample my love of a thousand moons!
I feel my veins turning into ripe slithering snakes,
As they breathe in my blood, ripping their way through my dead pores,
Turning my insides into lethal acid, making me burn and whimper in shame and misery,
For everything is driven out of me with such force that I  have become untouchable one,
I cannot even feel my own death now , my soul has no one to haunt (sadly),
For my poison still lives,  I am the faithless one!

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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-10 04:31 AM

This is pretty gruesome...I hope you don't feel this way all the time. Blue skies around the corner...

Love and hugs,

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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
2 posted 2000-04-11 09:36 AM

This is really great! (not great that you feel like this, but great as in very well-written) I am in the middle of writing a dark, creepy poem myself. I'm impressed!


 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)

since 2000-04-02
Posts 56

3 posted 2000-04-11 02:59 PM

I'm sure you'll feel better soon, I was down for a long time, but I feel better now, so will you,
well done this poem, it's very creepy,

since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

4 posted 2000-04-12 05:26 AM

great poem!!
but the theme is a little dark??
is this the way you are really feeling??


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