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since 2000-03-08
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Duluth, MN, USA

0 posted 2000-04-01 10:47 PM

I'm dying on the inside
I bleed from within.
All my emotions are churned by the wind.
I don't know what I feel
all I see is darkness
I feel pain, I feel heart ache
and I don't feel at all.

A Queen within a castle, locked up from
the world.
Rarely letting visitors from outside the walls.
At night, the Queen cries out with
But only walls listen.

She had a King, but she felt he was wrong.
She let him go, and now he's gone.
She cries out at night, calling his name
but only walls listen
to her pain.

A Queen with stubborn pride, is what she is
putting this upon herself.
"Walls, my only friends, listen to me now as
I say these words to you.." she said..
" Happy heart, once had I, but now a happy heart
is no more. A painful and stubborn pride have I.
I apologize, my King!!!"

The King never heard her that night, only walls

 I cry out. But no one hears.

© Copyright 2000 Heidi Wiitanen - All Rights Reserved
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-04-01 11:01 PM

Deeply painful work this is.  This is all too often true, for many of us have only the walls to hear of our pain.  Exellent work!

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2000-04-02 01:51 AM

man, that is a very well written poem, and too often true.... Heh, I find I sometimes that I have just the opisite problem, my friends seem to need someone to listen, but they wont talk, I wait and wait, but never the lips do crack.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.

since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

3 posted 2000-04-02 01:54 AM

wow! i like this heaps!!
such a good theme you chose! and the words you used flow so well

great post!


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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
4 posted 2000-04-02 07:51 AM

I hope you find someone to listen, I know how painful it is to be ignored. Thank you for sharing this beautiful sad poem with us. Keep writing.

Love and hugs,

since 2000-04-02
Posts 56

5 posted 2000-04-02 03:28 PM

wow, really well written, I sometimes have the same problem, I hope you'll find someone to listen

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6 posted 2000-04-03 12:11 PM

i love the way you said all that, very cool words and it soudns so cool when you say it!!

hope to read soem more!


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