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0 posted 2000-03-31 11:25 PM

i lay here in distress
to mourn my emptyness
my state of mind is pleading
but my inner heart is bleeding

a love found so confusing
i find myself here choosing
whether not to show my soul
or to keep it in whole

a weight upon the shoulders
the need to be loved and love faulters
a barrier to restrain
the fears that i contain

fear of being a phase
my mind is but a maze
fear of being not desired
a troubled heart is tired

the blood that is flowing
the emotions it is sowing
it speads throughout my veins
i realise it will always remain

this fear is how i exist
it does not cease but persists
it is a fault within my mould
it is a mispronunciation in my story told

denial and betrayal
in my disgust seem to prevail
this is the dark gift to myself from I
this gift is nothing but a lie

© Copyright 2000 Bec - All Rights Reserved
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since 2000-03-29
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1 posted 2000-04-01 01:22 AM

I really enjoyed that poem. Smile, everything will work out for the best. Im looking forward to more of your writing  
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2 posted 2000-04-01 02:05 AM

Hmmm....this is an interesting poem Bec. I liked the emotion that you displayed throughout it though. There was a nice flow happening in it.  

Like I said before, I'm here if you need me at all OK.  


 What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger

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since 2000-01-25
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Floating gently on a cloud....
3 posted 2000-04-01 03:48 AM

This is a beautiful expression of sadness. I am sure things will work out for the best. Don't give up hope of that, ok?

Love and hugs,

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4 posted 2000-04-01 07:09 AM

This is a wonderful poem. I hope you get through this. If you need someone to talk to, just give me a shout.

Thank you


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5 posted 2000-04-02 03:24 AM

another good poem from Bec!!!

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6 posted 2000-04-02 03:46 AM

I liked the poem,but I don't like the way you seem to feel.I wish that there was someting I could do.If you ever want to talk,I know you don't know me,but I want to be here for you.You can email me.But,you express your feelings well.
Keep writing,

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7 posted 2000-04-03 11:13 AM

great peom, emotion was really a constant, we feel alone alot but try to realy on the few who are always there
liked the poem alot!

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