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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
i lay here in distress to mourn my emptyness my state of mind is pleading but my inner heart is bleeding a love found so confusing i find myself here choosing whether not to show my soul or to keep it in whole a weight upon the shoulders the need to be loved and love faulters a barrier to restrain the fears that i contain fear of being a phase my mind is but a maze fear of being not desired a troubled heart is tired the blood that is flowing the emotions it is sowing it speads throughout my veins i realise it will always remain this fear is how i exist it does not cease but persists it is a fault within my mould it is a mispronunciation in my story told denial and betrayal in my disgust seem to prevail this is the dark gift to myself from I this gift is nothing but a lie |
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Suzanne Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 18Florida |
I really enjoyed that poem. Smile, everything will work out for the best. Im looking forward to more of your writing  |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hmmm....this is an interesting poem Bec. I liked the emotion that you displayed throughout it though. There was a nice flow happening in it.  Like I said before, I'm here if you need me at all OK. EJ What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a beautiful expression of sadness. I am sure things will work out for the best. Don't give up hope of that, ok? Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
This is a wonderful poem. I hope you get through this. If you need someone to talk to, just give me a shout. Thank you Lindsay |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
another good poem from Bec!!! 8o) Dana |
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Michele New Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 9 |
Hey,Bec! I liked the poem,but I don't like the way you seem to feel.I wish that there was someting I could do.If you ever want to talk,I know you don't know me,but I want to be here for you.You can email me.But,you express your feelings well. Keep writing, Michele |
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Comfrey83 Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 36Winchester, Mass USA |
great peom, emotion was really a constant, we feel alone alot but try to realy on the few who are always there liked the poem alot! -Andy |
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