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*~*~*butterfly*~*~* New Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 6Minnesota |
~*~blocked~*~ all my pain, all my imperfections, all my worries, always going through my head. my mind is full, my soul is full, my heart is open; no more. failure of trying to be me. i am to blame, this runs through my head, more and more. my mind, heart and soul are blocked, one huge cement wall, between me and the world. closed off from everyone, no one can get in, not even me. as much as i want to end it all, something says wait a little more. no one knows of my true pain, im so very, very scared to deal with myself. because what if im not here in the end. *kasandra* "When faced with a challenge search for a way, not a way out." --unknown |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey, I like this! I think you've been reading my mind. Great poem, lots of awesome phrases and feelings. *clap clap* Meredith *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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Mellon Collie Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49united states of america |
dear butterfly, the last two lines are my favorites, very ominous. *hehe* i dig it. i'm not a big fan of the centering though. i feel that it throws off the reader's rhythm. i know it does mine *heh*. anyway, good job and welcome to the teen forum. sincerely, the beautiful freak |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
For starters welcome to passions and I hope that you are as fulfilled here as we all are. This is a nice, soulful piece. Good description and a nice kind of flow running through it. However I must agree with Mellon Collie about having the writing in the center.  ..Either way it is a great piece and I look forward to reading more of your work.  ~AF~ What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger |
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*~*~*butterfly*~*~* New Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 6Minnesota |
thank you guys very much for your replies!! i appreciate it very much. i think you guys are right about the centering thing..... i never thought about til you mentioned it. thanx *kasandra* "When faced with a challenge search for a way, not a way out." -unknown |
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Suzanne Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 18Florida |
hey, that was a really good poem! i liked it a lot. I hope to read more from you!  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a beautiful poem. I can just feel all of the emotion running through it. I felt that way not so long ago, but my best friend helped me re enter the world of the living. I hope you find the way and that you have someone to take your hand and guide you out of your emotional prison. Keep posting, I would love to read some more of your work! Love and hugs, Lizzie(ESP) |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
An excellent poem. I am just amazed at the talent here at Passions. I could sense the sadness in your poem. I truly hope you get through this. You have friends here always willing to listen. Thank you Lindsay |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
i love this! excellent work! this is going on my poetry wall! yes...my poetry wall...a collection of works from people at passion! i can relate to this....i am scared that afer i explore myself...there will be nothing there. Bec |
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