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from a puzzled mind to you |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
presently..i have no idea of everything i am feeling...i could break down and cry...so if this poem makes no sense..it is what i am...nonesense turmoil reigns succession in the depths of my mind migration to my heart i fear what i will find beating of my heart penetrates the masks that i use to shield raw emotions arise the sword of relentlessness i wield i'm in too deep to surface gazing at the innocence of the sky from beneath i struggle fighting with what i want, fronting a lie he is all i live for i breathe to hear his voice my heart beats and sustains my life to live or die i have the choice can't help but feel that i am dragging him down pulling him under the waves the water ripples as he disappears beyond the point of saving chaos rules my life my chaos the last thing i wish upon him to wreck his life my fear my hope and confidence slowly dims in years i don't want him to look back and regret the time he spent on talking to me and sharing emotions then for him to forget and repent i am starting to push him away give prior warning that i am not what he wants i have this yearning to turn and run the exit from him taunts but i don't want to turn and flee i need to hold him in a warm embrace will this love last forever? or will it disappear without trace? trust and love are powerful attributes i don't hand out in succession but to him i give my all i want to be his possession i wish upon a star that the tides of time will bring happiness for on the tides i hope will bring me peace but failure and blackness is what i guess dawning horizon is so far away a need to reach out and grasp to hold those sunbeams in the palm of my hand an irrefutable task not one day will pass where my mind will be at rest i hide away in pain due to all that i confessed [This message has been edited by 4eva_at_heart (edited 03-25-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This poem is not nonsensical! I'm sorry you are feeling so down right now. Don't be ashamed of how you feel or exposing your feelings.I hope you find inner peace soon. Don't give up. Be strong and believe in yourself. |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
ESP says it all!! It's a great poem though!!! keep posting bec!! Dana |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is fantastic work Bec! I would have to say that this is one of the best pieces that I have read from you. This might explain why he was so down the other day....and you. Keep ya head up chicky. You know where I am if you need me. EJ |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I also think this is a good effort. Nice work with the rhyme and structure. Having read much of your poetry, it seems to me that you have good writing ability. Keep the good work coming. Nice job here. |
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bulletproof2312 Junior Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 28Beaumont Tx, 77707 |
WOW! Feelings are here. What an awesome poem with great emotion. Don't ever feel that poetry has to make sense, it's like art, some of the best is abstract! (although this poem is so real and true to life)... *love in Christ* --Skye "Here I stand I can do none other"---Luther |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
What an excellent poem. I hope you get through this emotional time. Be strong. If you need to talk, just let me know. Thank you Lindsay |
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