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0 posted 2000-03-25 05:48 AM

presently..i have no idea of everything i am feeling...i could break down and if this poem makes no is what i am...nonesense

turmoil reigns succession
in the depths of my mind
migration to my heart
i fear what i will find

beating of my heart
penetrates the masks that i use to shield
raw emotions arise
the sword of relentlessness i wield

i'm in too deep to surface
gazing at the innocence of the sky
from beneath i struggle
fighting with what i want, fronting a lie

he is all i live for
i breathe to hear his voice
my heart beats and sustains my life
to live or die i have the choice

can't help but feel that i am dragging him down
pulling him under the waves
the water ripples as he disappears
beyond the point of saving

chaos rules my life
my chaos the last thing i wish upon him
to wreck his life my fear
my hope and confidence slowly dims

in years i don't want him to look back
and regret the time he spent
on talking to me and sharing emotions
then for him to forget and repent

i am starting to push him away
give prior warning that i am not what he wants
i have this yearning to turn and run
the exit from him taunts

but i don't want to turn and flee
i need to hold him in a warm embrace
will this love last forever?
or will it disappear without trace?

trust and love are powerful
attributes i don't hand out in succession
but to him i give my all
i want to be his possession

i wish upon a star
that the tides of time will bring happiness
for on the tides i hope will bring me peace
but failure and blackness is what i guess

dawning horizon is so far away
a need to reach out and grasp
to hold those sunbeams in the palm of my hand
an irrefutable task

not one day will pass
where my mind will be at rest
i hide away in pain
due to all that i confessed

[This message has been edited by 4eva_at_heart (edited 03-25-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-03-25 10:39 AM

This poem is not nonsensical! I'm sorry you are feeling so down right now. Don't be ashamed of how you feel or exposing your
feelings.I hope you find inner peace soon. Don't give up. Be strong and believe in yourself.

since 2000-03-13
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2 posted 2000-03-31 03:12 AM

ESP says it all!!
It's a great poem though!!!
keep posting bec!!

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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
3 posted 2000-03-31 03:25 AM

This is fantastic work Bec! I would have to say that this is one of the best pieces that I have read from you. This might explain why he was so down the other day....and you.

Keep ya head up chicky. You know where I am if you need me.


Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
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4 posted 2000-03-31 03:04 PM

I also think this is a good effort.  Nice work with the rhyme and structure.
Having read much of your poetry, it seems to me that you have good writing ability.  Keep the good work coming.
Nice job here.

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since 2000-03-31
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5 posted 2000-03-31 10:47 PM

WOW! Feelings are here. What an awesome poem with great emotion. Don't ever feel that poetry has to make sense, it's like art, some of the best is abstract! (although this poem is so real and true to life)...
*love in Christ*

 "Here I stand I can do none other"---Luther

since 2000-03-31
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6 posted 2000-04-01 07:19 AM

What an excellent poem. I hope you get through this emotional time. Be strong.
If you need to talk, just let me know.

Thank you


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