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since 2000-03-19
Posts 5

0 posted 2000-03-20 06:01 PM

As I gaze into this mirror
I see a face
a face that I wish
that I could replace

I see short hair
cut and layered
a long neck
wrapped with a pink necklace

I see a slender body
tall and tan
long legs
skinny and frail

I look into my eyes
like stars they seem
at angles
they look as though they gleem

My freckles
spead over my face
not a sign of makeup
not a single trace

I gaze into this mirror
as if there is no end
I turn aways to go to bed
I think of all there is to mend....

 *Love is like quicksand, the longer you fall the harder it is to get out*

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since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

1 posted 2000-03-21 03:06 AM

i know how you feel. i always look in the mirror and find the faults that i want to change. But faults always go hand in hand with wonderful things. nobody is perfect...but nobody is a disappointment

Keep up the good writing


Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2000-03-22 08:25 AM

A great poem. But you must realize that we all have our fualts. Our voice, our face, some of us have to have glasses becuase our eyes are not so good. Some must wear braces. People come in all shapes and sizes, who are we to determine what others should look like on the outside?? We are all beautiful on the inside. Well, if ya EVER need to talk, I'll be glad to listen.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-03-22 11:34 AM

Beauty is more than physical appearance. What you are inside is more important. I doubt there is much to "mend". Everyone finds faults with their appearance in one way or another. It's probably normal.
Anyway, I liked your poem.  Nice rhyme and it read well.  You express yourself well also I think.

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