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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
my mind has clouded over the cogs of thinking have ceased no longer can i withdraw thoughts expressive words have been creased my paper lay barren the pen i use is dry no longer do my feelings flow i sit aside and cry i have so many emotions and thoughts i'd like to share no longer can i convert them to verse the words are simply not there frustration proves to share attributes with a barrier of steel and wire no longer can i write my mind is bound, i try and tire eyes so red and vision blurry staring at the screen no longer will my feelings be written for the words have gone and been |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
i would really appreciate any feed back  thanx |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Well, even though you speak of difficulty in writing, I think you did well with this one. Sometimes, the harder we struggle to find the right words, the more they elude us. I have read several of your postings and I think you write well. Be patient, your verse will come. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Interesting poem Bec. However I do like it very much. It expresses just how bloody irritating it is not to be able to get any words or verses happening. Jolly good work. EJ |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
haha, Great poem Bec. I know well the feeling of not being able to think what to write . . . . So I don't really, I can put almost anything into verse and speak in poems sometimes, which bugs my friends, but hey, this is still a great poem Bec, keep up the good work. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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