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PoeticDreams
Junior Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 35
Lindsay,Oklahoma US

0 posted 2000-03-19 03:25 AM




I had on new clothes,
New sneaks on my feet.
I was there for class on time,
Went to the back and took my seat.
Yeah, I'm moving up,
I'm already grown.
Soon I'll be graduating,
And out on my own.
I talked to some of my friends,
We were all having fun.
Said some things I shouldn't have
said,
Did stuff I shouldn't have done.
I knew I was different.
I felt God touch my heart,
I knew I should set a standard,
But then I'd be set apart.
Walking to the bus,
I was not looking for strength.
I heard the car tires screeching,
But now it's too late.
I'm standing in this room,
And I can see the heavenly gate.
Oh no! I never prayed.
I thought I had time to get it
straight.
An angel walked to me,
He had a book in his hand.
I knew it was the Book of Life,
When would this dream end?
I told him my name,
And he began to look.
Then he looked at me sadly and
said,
Your name is not in this book.
Angel, this is a dream,
No, I can't be dead!
He closed the book and turned away,
He whispered - You cannot proceed
ahead.
No...no this can't be real,
Angel, you can't turn me away.
Let me talk to God,
Maybe he'll let me stay.
He led me to the gate,
Jesus came to me.
He did not let me in but said,
Beloved what is your need?
Jesus, I cried, please,
Don't cast me away from you.
Tears ran down his face as he said,
You knew what you needed to do.
Lord, please I'm young,
I never thought I would die.
I thought I'd have plenty of time,
Death caught me by surprise.
Lord, I went to church,
Please Jesus, I believe.
He said you would not accept me,
My love you would not receive.
Lord, there were too many
hypocrites,
They weren't being true.
He took a step back and asked,
What does that have to do with you?
Lord, my family claimed to be
saved,
They weren't real. You know.
He said, I died for you,
Now I have to go.
I fell to my knees crying to Him,
Lord, I planned to be real
tomorrow.
I couldn't, make Him understand,
I had never -- felt such sorrow.
Then it hit me hard, I said,
Lord, where will I go?
He looked into my eyes and said,
My child you already know.
Please Jesus, I begged,
The place is so hot.
It seemed to trouble and grieve
him,
He whispered, DEPART FROM ME, I
KNOW
YOU NOT.
Lord, you're supposed to be love,
How can you send me to damnation?
He replied, With your mouth you
said
you loved me,
But each day you rejected my
salvation.
With that in an instant,
Day turned into night.
I never knew such torture could be,
Now too late, I know the Bible is
right.
If I can tell you anything,
Hell has no age.
It is a place of torture,
Separated from God and full of
rage.
You know, I thought it was funny
a joke,
But this one thing is true.
If you never accept Jesus Christ,
HELL IS WAITING FOR YOU!


 ~¬§Always look to the
sunrise and you'll never
see the shadows¤~Anne
Frank

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LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
1 posted 2000-03-19 04:37 PM


You wrote about having not taken a stand in school for fear of what others would think, well I think you are very brave to write this while knowing it may offend some of the people here. I DO believe in God, and I must say you have the power to write out of your own experiences and make it believable. I'm sure this will make everyone reconsider their heart's condition. I commend you.
4eva_at_heart
Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

2 posted 2000-03-20 04:12 AM


this is really powerful.
and suddenly i am starting to think about everything explored in this piece...

great work

Bec

angel6917
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
3 posted 2000-03-20 04:13 PM


I do believe in God,
and I understand what you are saying in this poem.
Always keep God in your heart,
something I've learned...
~Kristi Lynn

Ashiraladoni
Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 52
Duluth, MN, USA
4 posted 2000-03-20 10:10 PM


You're poem strikes a fear within me. Good piece, heart felt and to the point. Keep up the the good work.
~Ashiraladoni


 " To be free, or to be enslaved, that is the question."

Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

5 posted 2000-03-21 04:13 PM


Poetic dreams,
Hey I just wanted to let you know that I really appreciated this poem, It was very powerful, and to the point, I think oyu got across what you wanted to. And I'm not saying this just to be nice, cause I'll let you know that although I have been here for about 3 months, you are the first person I Have posted a reply to, Once again, I really appreciate this poem !! I would really like to know Why you came up with this, that is if you don't mind telling me... My Address is D1R6C@aol.com. and just to answer your question, yes I do believe in God.. Take care, and keep up the good work...

                          ) Chico.

Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

6 posted 2000-03-21 04:16 PM


Poetic dreams,
Hey I just wanted to let you know that I really appreciated this poem, It was very powerful, and to the point, I think oyu got across what you wanted to. And I'm not saying this just to be nice, cause I'll let you know that although I have been here for about 3 months, you are the first person I Have posted a reply to, Once again, I really appreciate this poem !! I would really like to know Why you came up with this, that is if you don't mind telling me... My Address is D1R6C@aol.com. and just to answer your question, yes I do believe in God.. Take care, and keep up the good work...

                          ) Chico.

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