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since 1999-07-26
Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA

0 posted 1999-10-28 09:34 PM

You said things won’t work out.
I said I think you’re right.
Now you say “Come back to me,
I wanna hold you tight.”

I said “You know I hove you”.
You agreed and said “ I love you too.
But we must now go our separate ways.” You said
So why should I cry over you?

You keep on changing your mind.
You say our love is one of a kind.
Then you tell me we cant be together.
And you play this game with me forever.

You torture my heart.
You tear it apart,
Now I lye here and think,
“if you’ve done this to me, why should I cry over you?”

© Copyright 1999 Olga - All Rights Reserved
Paul Hoekman
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382
Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>
1 posted 2000-03-03 12:27 PM

You should consider a broader
interest base to work with
there is so much more going on.
Just need to expand your talent,
through variety in subject matter.

Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 33
Miami, Florida United States
2 posted 2000-03-03 03:49 AM

This was a good poem! I been in a relationship exactly like that and my ex kept playing mind games with me until I broke up with him!
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
3 posted 2000-03-03 05:43 AM

I know this is coming straight from the heart and I know that it's hard to shake off feelings of love but it seems to me this is just a one way thing and I think you need to move on no matter how hard it is, you may not think so now but believe me things do get better and you will find new love.  

 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

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