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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
Faster i ran over the rocks slipping in the sand towards the cliff And i lept off and kept running flying flying faster than i could have ever run An i flew to the tallest mountain in the farthest corner of the Urth into the depest cave to hold you as you cried "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
beautiful sentiment here. I would do the same, if not more for several of my friends. Hey, know what? This is about the same thing as the one poem I posted, we bare through it, i think that is what I called it..... *shrugs* oh well, nice poem. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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perpetual_vertigo8 New Member
since 2000-03-16
Posts 3 |
Beautiful poem.. it really captures the essence of loyalty and love.. thanks for sharing! |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
You've done a wonderful job of showing your faithfulness to the one this poem is for. I like the way you put the main point at the end, it was a cool technique. I loved it.  *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
I really like this poem....the way you expressed yourself was kinda different than normal, and I liked it. Heh..funny how love will make you willing to jump off cliffs. April |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
wonderful job - use of imagery makes your emotion so real. keep up the good work  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a lovely poem. It describes my feelings toward my friends perfectly. Thanks for sharing it with us! |
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