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since 2000-03-09
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0 posted 2000-03-16 05:48 PM

Faster i ran
over the rocks
slipping in the sand
towards the cliff

And i lept off
and kept running
flying faster than i could have ever run

An i flew to the tallest mountain
in the farthest corner of the Urth
into the depest cave
to hold you as you cried

 "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write

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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
1 posted 2000-03-16 07:22 PM

beautiful sentiment here. I would do the same, if not more for several of my friends. Hey, know what? This is about the same thing as the one poem I posted, we bare through it, i think that is what I called it..... *shrugs* oh well, nice poem.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.

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since 2000-03-16
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2 posted 2000-03-16 08:47 PM

Beautiful poem.. it really captures the essence of loyalty and love.. thanks for sharing!
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-03-16 10:22 PM

You've done a wonderful job of showing your faithfulness to the one this poem is for. I like the way you put the main point at the end, it was a cool technique. I loved it.  

 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)

April Resi
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
4 posted 2000-03-17 01:13 AM

I really like this poem....the way you expressed yourself was kinda different than normal, and I liked it. Heh..funny how love will make you willing to jump off cliffs.

since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
5 posted 2000-03-26 01:07 PM

wonderful job - use of imagery makes your emotion so real.  keep up the good work  
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since 2000-01-25
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Floating gently on a cloud....
6 posted 2000-03-27 12:37 PM

This is a lovely poem. It describes my feelings toward my friends perfectly. Thanks for sharing it with us!
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