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Why Dad???? |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
I was only 2 or 3, When you went away, I'm sick of mum saying, "he'll be back someday" I know your gone for good dad, But why do you haunt me at night, All i want is a night without thinking of you, It's like your asking for a fight. I really really hate you dad, But i wonder how life would be, If you were together with us, With Mum, steph and me. All i have is photos, To reming me of my past, If i count who loves me, I'm sure to put you last. I know i have to be strong, Look over what you've done, I know that things would have been different, If i was your only son. I found out that you cheated, You broke my heart in two, Now my life is shattered, And its all because of you. I can remember the warm tears, running down my face, You just took of and went, Without leaving a trace. I still love you dad, I'm sure you still love me, Maybe you'll came back one day, But we'll just have to see. Your probably in prison, Thinking "what have i done" You've lost absolutly everything, Including your own son. Maybe mum will find someone new, Someone who wont leave, You get me so worked up dad, Sometimes i can hardly breathe. I know i'll try my best, In whatever I decide to do, And if i fail and lose everything i love, I know I'm taking after you. |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
hey great work!! except one thing one time you say you hate him and the next you love him.... anyway i dunno what its like not to have a parent cause mine are both together but sometimes things are for the best your mom probably would be miserable if he stuck around... best wishes to you!! dana |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
hey peoples...this poem is one that i made up lookingg from a guys point of veiw! Not mine, this isnt a life story of myself, im a female!  To have a parent is to love them, thats why it is called "unconditional love" but to hate a parent, you still love them too, cos that love is unconditional.Thanx for replying! LOve Melly  |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
bec....ej...plz reply to this ??? |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
oh my god. I can not even begin to imagine what that must feel like. I'm so sorry. *is sad now* "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Mel, Wow, <is sad>. I know that this isn't a real story, from reading earlier comments, but at the same time, i really impressed with your ability to make us feel like it's real. This was beautifully said, and like i said I'm amazed that you could imagine yourself so much into that position that you could write this. Keep up the good work!! ~Sarah |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
thanx i really appriciate it when people reply, it makes you feel soooo good. everyone who looks at this is a great poet too, it doesnt matter how you write your poet, and how good it is, its the passion you have for it. If you dont have passion, poetry wouldnt be so powerful like it is Everyone keep up the good work! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is very impressive I often write things that are not necessarily about me, so I can relate to the way you can do this. It was very heartfelt LoL tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Interesting read. I liked the last two lines. Thought you did a good job of writing from a different point of view. |
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devil_tongue Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 50 |
This is a good poem. There is alot of emotion displayed throughout this piece. |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
i actually thought that this poem was harsh towards the dad, its hurtfull but very powerful. The dad is an asshole so yeah thats why i worte about this. Love always mel |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hey this is fabulous writing..you seems to be very in touch with your feelings..I am sure that every young child that has been deserted by their father has felt these exact same feelings of rejection and hurt, the hope that perhaps he may return, and the fear that you may end up exactly like him. I understand how you could both love and hate this man. You love him because he will always be your father and you hate him because he abandoned you and your mother. James |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
thanks james, i know how abbandment feels, but dad moved only 30 minutes away and we still see him and he still loves us. But anyways Love mel |
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huney_mel Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 52 |
thanx |
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