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since 2000-03-09
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0 posted 2000-03-12 11:17 PM

i held you in my arms
and yet we were so much closer
it was one of the few times
when we could be alone together

we looked to the stars glimmering
you were cold and couldnt stop shivering
i held you to my cheast
to keep you warm i did my best

we had some laughs
but we had to leave
we had been there an hour and a half
the thought of you leaving made my heart heave

i dropped you off and sai good-bye
on the way home i wanted to cry
i knew it would be another week
until we got to look at the stars cheek to cheek

 "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write

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since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

1 posted 2000-03-12 11:21 PM

oh...this is so beautiful...but at the same time so sad.
i don't think anybody really likes the end of happy things.

keep up the good work


since 2000-03-09
Posts 52

2 posted 2000-03-12 11:30 PM

thats soooooo cute! Well done, i hate leaving people i love too   As bec said, keep up the good work!

since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
3 posted 2000-03-13 09:48 AM

This is such a good poem!  I love it!  Keep up the good work.  I hope to see more from you soon.
~Kristi Lynn

since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
4 posted 2000-03-13 10:33 PM

very well done   leaving ones we care so much for is never easy, even when we're just leaving them for a little while.  keep 'em coming    
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