Even before the world was made

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Teen Poetry #2

Even before the world was made

eagle
Junior Member

since 1999-10-20

Posts 39
singapore

0 posted 1999-10-26 11:09 AM

Even before the world was made

Even before the world was made
I think I must have known you
for all your words and beauty bade
me to say I love you

When first the clouds were formed up high
and birds start to sing
the feeling was there in the sky
and the sun's summer fling

Then the water came and covered
many parts of land
and how in my heart I suffered
just to touch your hand

Then Noah took two by two
creatures to the ark
you know not that I think of you
when day gives way to dark

And even as the sun now sets
and dark consumes the land
my love for you but only gets
abundant as the sand

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

1 posted 1999-10-26 11:17 AM

wow, liked this one! good imagery, the first stanza is the best.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Looking-glass
Junior Member

since 1999-10-26

Posts 10
Singapore

2 posted 1999-10-27 06:48 AM

Great poem! A lot of imageries used to show your love. I like the linw---"when dark consumes the land". It's very nice! Keep your poems coming!!!

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God created the world tomorrow
Life is nothing but memories

eagle
Junior Member

since 1999-10-20

Posts 39
singapore

3 posted 1999-10-27 09:06 AM

Hey, thanks guys!

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