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Teen Poetry #2

wanting

emptyness
Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

0 posted 2000-03-10 03:57 PM

i want to see her
i want to talk to her
i want to touch her
i want to love her

i need to tell her how i feel
i need to be with her
i need to know how she feels
i need her

DragonFang
Senior Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 522
Missouri, USA

1 posted 2000-03-10 05:57 PM

I like it, it sums up the way one must feel when admiring another from afar. Kinda the way I've felt about a girl recently.

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

2 posted 2000-03-10 10:30 PM

This says a lot, emptyness. I sensed a lot of yearning. Wonderful work, keep it up!

*Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

Tara
Member

since 2000-02-21

Posts 76
Minnesota

3 posted 2000-03-11 12:35 PM

for some reason unknown to me i just liked this poem. it's short sweet and to the point. i hope to read more from you.

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

4 posted 2000-03-11 12:57 PM

good job with this one

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