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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
This is a little song i wrote today. Just thought it sounded cool so i'll share it with you all. Imagine some cool music being played while you read it, (just for dramatics j/k). Here ya go stuck in this simulation devoid of stimulation my brain falls on weakened knees breakin' out, where's my keys broke down the wall, now i can see I must get away from man's inhumanity I know that place that place where we sat alone wastin' life away knowin' one day i'd be gone Just like parted friends back together to tie up loose ends one end in your hand of strif other lenced around me, draining my life I know that place that place where we sat alone wastin' life away knowin' one day i'd be gone Just like fighters on the battle field i turned my back, my fate is sealed time has run out, almost to the end remember back in the day when you were my friend You know that place where we sat alone i wasted my life away and i knew when i came back you'd be gone 3-7-00 "Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it." Henry David Thoreau Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
i like this!! i imagined it with the groovey music and i could see it as a chart topper  cya Bec  [This message has been edited by 4eva_at_heart (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
sorry...but i accidently posted twice and i couldn't delete this....so well done again!! Bec  [This message has been edited by 4eva_at_heart (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I wish I could say that I didn't understand this poem but sadly I do. It's very beautiful and well written. Very heartfelt, put some music to it and as 4eva said, you could have something! "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all. |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
I agree with everyone. You have written a very good thing here. I can relate to the emotions and felings here, and I'm sure with the right kind of music this would be an awesome song! - Gina |
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