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since 2000-01-27
Posts 271

0 posted 2000-03-06 11:45 AM

In Your Eyes

I asked you the question
Then we sat and talked
Your words were hallow
And eyes filled with thought
In your eyes I found Words
Words trapped by the tounge
In your eyes you warned me
Teased me with feelings, i see
In your eyes fear
Lost in world of maddness
With emotions standing still
Dreams speek to me
Your eyes still shine
I'm defended by silence
Defeated by time
The end i know not
Waiting to see what time buys
But for now, i'm lost in your eyes


 "Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it."
Henry David Thoreau

Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't might die.

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Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-03-06 12:44 PM

Someone said "the eyes are the window to the soul".  This came to mind as I read your poem.  I think this is really well written.
"I'm defended by silence, defeated by time".
nice lines.
Good work.

since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~
2 posted 2000-03-06 12:48 PM

Very well worded. I really liked this. Keep it up!  

"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

since 2000-01-20
Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA
3 posted 2000-03-07 11:28 AM

Very good!  I liked this poem a lot.  I think you have written this very well.  Keep up the good work.  And remember to always keep your head up.
- Gina

since 2000-01-31
Posts 89

4 posted 2000-03-07 11:32 AM

That really was beautiful

since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

5 posted 2000-03-07 02:11 PM

That was beautiful.

 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."

It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.

Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.

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