[Untitled] this cannot be named, there's no names for such things

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[Untitled] this cannot be named, there's no names for such things

hoppy
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

0 posted 2000-03-04 11:42 PM

ok, so i've been away for a while so i figured i'd make up for lost time. Here's one that i did write. I'm not to sure if it makes sense to anyone else but me but i figured i'd share it none-the-less.

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Standing in moon light
Your standing by
Tears bluring my sight
I hear you sigh

heart bleeding on my shirt
standing by the way side
cloths red and stained
you cast them aside

lost sight of my path
it's covered in dust
there's goes your path
all filled with lust

stubbling begging and bleeding
my heart and mind are compeating
one thought on my mind
one crack in my heart
will she ever come back
if not, i blame the art

3-4-00

"Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it."
Henry David Thoreau

Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't live...you might die.

Paul Hoekman
Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 382
Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>

1 posted 2000-03-05 12:03 PM

It doesn't have to make sense
to anyone else.
I like it!
A writing like this leaves room for
all sorts of interpretation.
And isn't that what artists are looking
to accomplish with their work?
Abstracts, Vagues yet enough for anyone
to get something out of it,
My only criticism is:
I do like to see a title, to me
it's part of the piece.
Maybe just "The Art"

Bizzy
New Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 2

2 posted 2000-03-05 12:32 PM

That poem was so awsome. You are a very talented writer. I hope to be reading some more of your work soon.

Wicced_Witch
Member

since 2000-02-06

Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA

3 posted 2000-03-05 11:46 PM

I have to agree with Paul on this one. It really doesn't have to make sense. It's still a great poem. I like the way it lets everyone can draw their own conclusions on what it means.

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