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since 2000-02-06
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Clarksville, TN, USA

0 posted 2000-03-01 01:06 AM

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Personally I think this sucks, but I thought I'd put it up anyways and maybe someone can help me.

All my life I've wondered,
What did I do wrong?
Why couldn't you just love me?
Why didn't I belong?

Though I tried my hardest,
Nothing I did was right.
I thought it was my fault.
All we ever did was fight.

I know I wasn't perfect.
I tried my hardest to be close.
Alot of people loved me,
Except the one I needed most.

No matter what I tried,
No matter how good the speech.
I always lost the battle,
Your love just out of my reach.

Wrapped in a blanket of self-pity,
I hid from all the rest.
The world could not help me,
Only mothers should know best.

I stayed hidden within myself,
For most of my teenage years.
Then I decided to move on,
To find something new to hold dear.

I am coming out of my shell mom.
You can no longer tie me down.
You no longer are my ring leader,
I refuse to be your clown.

My life is not a circus,
I am not here to amuse you.
You probably found it funny,
Doing the things I would do.

I tried hard to win your love,
But nothing I did was right.
I am breaking these chains mom,
I refuse to play in your fight.

[This message has been edited by Wicced_Witch (edited 03-02-2000).]

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Posts 143
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1 posted 2000-03-01 01:15 AM

I don`t think that this "sucks"at all.
Being a father myself I know that parents have a hard time letting their kids grow up and spread their wings.
Have you sat down with your mom and just had a heart to heart talk with her?
Kinda like what you`ve done hear in the forum?
You`ve done a nice job at writing your feelings here,try it with mom.
Take care and remember in the open forum #6
there is alot of us that were once kids to.
I know that any one in that forum would be more than happy to listen to anything that you need or want to chat about.
Take care and nice read

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-03-01 04:43 PM

Does not suck!!!!
Actually, the poem is well written, stong with emotion and feeling.
Parents often times try too hard to control their children.  There are no parenting classes so parents have to do the job the best they know how, I suppose.  In this crazy and scary world, you can't always blame parents for being over protective.  There is so much violence out there and many wrong directions that young people can take.  It's a struggle for them and you, but better "tough love" than no love.
I'm a parent and know what it means to travel that road.
Hope to see more of your writing.

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