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A Heathen Child's Prayer
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A Heathen Child's Prayer |
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hailfellow Junior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 28 |
Okay, now for #2. I appreciate all of the nice comments received about my first post. You all know how to make a guy feel welcome. In the dark, in the night, No glow blinding eyeless sight, Softly perceiving something not right, An evil presence, not of light. I'm too alone, afraid to fight. Someone bring to me a light. Someone set this evil right. Curse this dark, this lack of sight. Shivering, crying, embraced by night. |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
hmmm, as a poem i can say that it wasn't bad at all and that you have talent, but5 i didn't like the content "that's my opinion i could be wrong" rich-pa |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
halifellow: although i'm not sure i understand the implications you might have intended for the word "heathen", i do feel that this is a good poem... keep up the good work  sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest And their bleating was like a wet salmon slapped upon the land---slap! slap! slap! |
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