|Teen Poetry #2|
|A Heathen Child's Prayer|
since 2000-02-28Posts 28
Okay, now for #2. I appreciate all of the nice comments received about my first post. You all know how to make a guy feel welcome.
In the dark, in the night,
No glow blinding eyeless sight,
Softly perceiving something not right,
An evil presence, not of light.
I'm too alone, afraid to fight.
Someone bring to me a light.
Someone set this evil right.
Curse this dark, this lack of sight.
Shivering, crying, embraced by night.
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since 2000-02-07Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
hmmm, as a poem i can say that it wasn't bad at all and that you have talent, but5 i didn't like the content "that's my opinion i could be wrong"
since 1999-12-04Posts 549
halifellow: although i'm not sure i understand the implications you might have intended for the word "heathen", i do feel that this is a good poem... keep up the good work
jerome the mysterious priest
And their bleating was like a wet salmon
slapped upon the land---slap! slap! slap!
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