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I Waved Goodbye
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I Waved Goodbye |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
You hurt me You trapped me You tormented You teased me You took me You dropped me You scared me You left me I cried I escaped I fought back I ignored you I took back I lifted myself I became braver I waved goodbye Not my best work, but here it is! stay cool  ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 03-01-2000).] |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I thought your poem was great, Lavada. Keep up the good work. I'm glad to see a new post from you after so long. ~Kristi Lynn |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks angel, It's good to be back  stay cool ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I think your last line would be a good title "I waived goodbye" Your poem showed a strength that is good to see. Good work and hello again! |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks Danny..it's great to be posting again Been kind of down lately...but I'm better now stay cool ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Oh..and thanks for the title! ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
You changed You laughed You abused me You bruised me I accepted I closed my ears I hit back I healed Two more verses I added...Maybe I should put them before the last verse??? "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Lavada~ These last 2 verses are very good. I think the second new stanza should be before the last verse, and the first new one should be either before or after the second verse- your choice. ~Kristi Lynn |
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