|Teen Poetry #2|
|another absolute nowhere.....|
since 1999-08-13Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A
the obscene revulsion
the same twisted thing again
if it was free..it still couldnt end
confined in me
my new found superficial enemy
starts pumping those juices again
look at whats pretty..
lets examine what we call fair
treat you with whats left of me
but still find the change of heart
leads to an absolute nowhere.....
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since 2000-01-27Posts 271
great poem, i'm not totally sure of everything you meant by it but i think i got most of it.
i do like the "let's examine what's fair" line
one thing i would suggest is fixin' the next to last line a bit with the wording, i got a little tripped up there.
maybe something like
"still finding this change of heart"
other than that i like keep good poems coming
"If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity."
Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't live...you might die.
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