Teen Poetry #2 |
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Our Bleak Moment Of Perfection |
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-LeAnn- Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 13San Antonio,TX |
As We Sit Here We Listen To Each Other Breathing With The Passion Wondering If The Moment Could Ever Reach A Higher Perfection…… But Then We STOPPED The Moment Was Gone And We Said With A Smile & Deep Sigh Maybe We Were…… Just Meant To Be…… FREINDS……… And This Was……… Our Bleak Moment Of PERFECTION |
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-LeAnn- Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 13San Antonio,TX |
I'm sorry about that poem…… it doesn't make sense… it doesn't rhyme or sem to have a point… & its beyond confusing in its simplicity!!!! I have NO CLUE WHY i posted that…… SORRY!!! <img src="http://netpoets.net/img/ms02.gif" peace |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
It does too make sense...either that or I'm crossing over to the crazy side and deciphering the undecipherable. DON'T SCARE ME!! And who says poetry has to rhyme? I liked it. "The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Poetry doesn't have to rhyme, this makes perfect sense. Unforunately I understand, and I'm sure many people do. It's just kind of sad that people go to that level to realize what they probably already knew. And in this world the way it is today, all the dangers and disease this is a very powerful topic to bring up and should be brought up more often. Well done. |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
Sadly, I understand perfectly. Beautiful poem. "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I liked it as well. I think that moment of perfection came with an understanding that you two truly knew that friendship was more important than other outcomes from moment. Good stuff...... |
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babychicken_1 Junior Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 11 |
I thought you showed a lot of emotion in this piece and you did a very good job. Keep up the good work.! |
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