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0 posted 2000-02-21 11:20 AM

A dream came to me last night in bed
It was a complex disorder of confusion and dread
I walked down the darkness where light could be felt
Nothing could talk but at my foot they all knelt
Asking in tounges not known to me
I only marvled at what my eyes could now see
I lifted my head to see a whole in the light
It was a woman steping out into my sight
I walked into the dark light to touch her hand
Like i was acting on an unsaid command
In her eyes all the worlds i could see
She spoke and said, do you want to be with me
She reached inside me and took hold of my heart
And till this day i dream this dream everynight after dark

 "If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity."

Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't might die.

© Copyright 2000 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-02-21 12:14 PM

Interesting read!  Good rhyme and resolution!

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since 2000-01-28
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2 posted 2000-02-21 04:29 PM

Very nice.....I like the rhyme too. Great job!


 "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders."

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since 2002-06-21
Posts 710
in the interzone now
3 posted 2002-07-27 10:38 AM

I am so thinking of succubi right now... And have Type O Negative's Haunted stuck in my head... And want to congratulate Lilith for creating the standard for such images in the first place.

Very cool poem.

written in blood before everything went black


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the wonderful land of oz
4 posted 2002-11-01 03:31 AM

pip sure has come a long way.

good write.

it's nice to see some of your earlier work.


[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-01-2002 03:32 AM).]

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Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2007-11-15 07:48 PM



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