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since 2000-02-19
Posts 13
San Antonio,TX

0 posted 2000-02-19 08:31 PM

As I sit & wonder,
Why things are this way,
Things change & shock me like thunder,
i speachless why is this? i have nothing 2 say,
Will No one listen? or care?,
I'm just alone in this life,
Zoning out w/ a blank stare,
too young 2 wish of this,
I want 2 be his wife,
please, for a moment my age u must dissmiss,
i am as confused as ever,
changing my ways & beliefs like the weather,
but i think that love is the key,
if only he'd see,
jumping from one thing 2 the next,
oh god, i'm just so vexed,
still a virgin & drug-free i have my morals this is me,
music is my life yes this is true,
but then i think of him & music is NOTHING i just wanna scream "BABY I LOVE U!!",
I guess i'll call him now,
& i'm still confused,
maybe he'll figure out how i feel,
how i love him & think he's just WOW,
I know this light he shines wont be diffused,
but i wish he knew THAT WHEN I SAY

{This Is 4 Bernieā€¦}

[This message has been edited by -LeAnn- (edited 02-20-2000).]

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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
1 posted 2000-02-19 08:45 PM

I've felt this way before and though the ending for that dream and wish ended bitterly, I know there are times when it doesn't.  Lovely poem.  Welcome to Passions.


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

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2 posted 2000-02-19 09:19 PM

Wow, this is a great poem! I can relate to what you are talking about. Keep up the good work, and welcome to Passions! I'll be looking for more of your work!

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

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since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-02-20 02:14 AM

Welcome to passions. Nice first poem. If I could offer one point of advice though, it is to type out all the words rather than using Ur, 2, 4, w/, etc. It makes the poem look and read a little better. I guess I am really anal about this, but not capitalizing I also bugs me  
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

4 posted 2000-02-20 09:43 AM

This is a great first post! Welcome to Passions! I gotta agree with Mistik however about the capitalization and all the abreviations. It makes the poem look a lot nicer when you don't do that. The poem was really good though! Keep up the good work!  


 "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders."

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