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Smore Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 67el paso |
They just took your life away On that late October day I never got to say good-bye How could they just let you die? They cocked their guns without a thought Your misery is what they sought I wanted so badly for you to fight But giving up was probably right. I know I shouldn't be feeling sad Where you're at you're probably glad We are never far apart I carry you within my heart Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love ~Smore |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
This is so sad....I'm sorry about what happened. Losing someone is pretty hard. Good luck though and nice poem. as for title suggestions...I'm not good at that, but maybe October Day? Salma |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
smore: this poem leaves me a little frightened... who/what is this poem about??... are the things written about metaphorical? or literal?... sincerely, jerome the melancholy priest Disarm you with a smile And leave you like they left me here To wither in denial The bitterness of one who's left alone --[billy corgan]-- |
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Smore Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 67el paso |
This poem is about my cousin, he was one of the most important people in my life, and his death still is in my head. I thought maybe if I wrote about it, I'd feel better. On October 14 of 97 he was shot by some gang members. It changed my perspective on so many things and for that I'm so grateful, I'm just sad I had to learn the way I did. In what way did this frighten you? [This message has been edited by Smore (edited 02-18-2000).] |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
How about "A Life Taken" as a title. Very sad story and unfortunate that your cousin lost his life. Glad you wrote this poem. I hope many others read it. Keep writing! Danny |
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