|Teen Poetry #2
|Cupid's Arrow(A really good poem)
since 2000-02-14Posts 183
Oh no I think I've been hit
I think it's cupid's arrow
Now I'm going to have a fit
Being in love is great
It's just ending it I hate
I love the feeling that I get
When you're about to kiss me
That day our lips first met
The warmth I felt when you first hugged me
That feeling I'll never forget I'm in love and you're the only person
I want to see
Its been two months and
I hope you won't dump me
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since 2000-02-14Posts 183
Wonderful! Couldn't have said it better myself.
since 1999-11-09Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
I love Cupid/Eros. I love Anteros ever more. Nice poem, though you shouldn't put "really good poem" in the subject. It's deserved, but it tends to be redundant. Lovely, nonetheless. Welcome to the Teen Forums and to Passions.
"Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."
"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."
since 2000-01-13Posts 528
Just wanted to welcome you to our little group here, and congradulate you on your writing. Good job.
"The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul
since 1999-11-23Posts 120
Tight poem man!! I'm guess you wrote it for you girl!! I love poems that involve cupids. anyways keep up the good work bud!!
"Live to love or why live at all"
since 1999-12-04Posts 549
nikkisweet: i have mixed feelings about this one... honestly i just flat-out dont like the last line... it seems like a plea for him to stay with you rather than the expression of adoration that i expected... of course, it may just be that it's different from what i'm used to seeing in love poetry, but i think with a little thought you could come up with something better... the rhyme was a little sing-songy, but i have no problem with that... especially since this is only your first post... i think you express yourself well and fill out the ideas in a poetic manner that is admirable... i hope to read more of your work soon
jerome the melancholy priest
as far as you take me, that's where i believe
the realm of soft delusions, floating on the leaves
on a distant shoreline, she waves her arms to me
as all the thought police, are closing in for sleep
[billy corgan "porcelina of the vast oceans"]
since 1999-09-26Posts 2621
Welcome to Passions. I hope you enjoy sharing your work with us. I don't enjoy valentine's day so this poem kind of hit a nerve for me but hey, that is the way life is...lol.
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since 1999-12-02Posts 443
Welcome to Passions. I'm looking forward to getting to know you and reading some of your other poems. Good job on this one.
"WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler
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