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Hoping beside pain |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa 
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Love and hate is a part of us all. There will come times that we will fall, we will get hurt, without understanding, wondering why we didn't have a safe landing. But when we fall we should quickly get up, start again, never give up. Cause after the darkness a new day will dawn, and a rainbow will appear after the storm. After the pian and the loss we may feel, there will come a time our wounds will heel. We'll experience inner peace and a deeper appreciation of the true meaning of life... God's creation. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Excellent! What a great message for all to read. Everyone get's discouraged one time or another and your message provides a remedy when none seems available. Well written! Danny |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
WOW! I love this poem! I understand the point of view completely where you're coming from, the words would come in handy when my friends have low times, or when I have my low times. I look forward to reading more of your poems in the near future... ~Kristi Lynn  "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
an excellent poem with a great massage, i also found it refreshingly innocent in the William Blake sort of way, there were some minor spelling errors but that's irrelavent, i dig it yo rich-pa |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Take it to heart, is all I can say Wise words and put so nicely together A poem to keep and cherish The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I really like this poem! Yes, there is always hope with God! Keep up the good work! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
tears of pearl: i like the poem, but i'm not sure i see how you drew the connection between the final statement in the last line and the rest of the poem... pain, the flood imagery, and healing all seem to point towards perseverance more than creation in my mind... mabye you could enlighten me... sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Thanks all you guys, thanks for all the positive feedback. poetry_kills...I'll try my best... God is the Creater of all life, but what is life? Is it having a heartbeat, is it breathing, or is it getting up each morning? Well, I guess it is, but life is also about learning, hurting, anger, pain, depression, loving, caring, laughting, sharing times with the people you love, people that loves you. Don't we sometimes create situasion for ourselves, sometimes we cope, sometimes we don't, but we experience one or the other feeling. I'm not sure what my point is...I guess what I'm trying to say is...if you don't make peace with the fact that things woun't always go the way you want it to go and that there will be times you will feel like braking down, you woun't be able to live your life, woun't be able to be all you can be without worriing about what others say. You will be afraid...wondering what bad thing is going to happen to you next. When you found that inner peace, you will be able to understand and accept life, or creation like I said. Isn't life a creation? I hope that you'll find some sence in what I said, hope I answered your question. Christelle |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
Great message and great work...it reallly helped me when i read it cause i was feelin pretty down but i read ur poem and now i feel rejuvenated and happy...Great work and i hope to see more   To be or not to be...that is the question. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Thank you chic, I'm glad that my poem was able to help someone. |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Good job Tears. Welcome back to Passions. It has been awhile. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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