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Love's Last Kiss
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Love's Last Kiss |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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As I travel This journey long My soul unravels It's weeping song I once chose To keep your heart Now we stand close So far apart Our past has fled It's wake still resides The way I bled The way you cried I know you long To make amends It feels so wrong To live as "friends" But dare I raise My eyes to thee When you will gaze And never see? I must away Before I fall Hear what you say Answer the call My love, cry not Please don't despair What I have wrought My tears are there You are so brave Your warmth I'll miss And to my grave I'll carry your kiss |
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S3NSATION18 Junior Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 31 |
i really liked your poem especially the last line...keep up the good work... |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I love it! It makes me think of the guy I fell head over heels for, though. Good job! ~Kristi Lynn  "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
Nice poem. Alot of us have probably felt this way at one time or another, you wrote about it well... "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE [This message has been edited by Nights (edited 02-10-2000).] |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
lyricfetish: this is simply enchanting  such a moving tale you unravel in this simple piece... there are a few minor discrepancies with structure, but i wont nitpick over something so beautiful...sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
really well written you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
A very well put poem...i like it....i know that feeling, so i am touched....keep it up... -Ender |
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Smore Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 67el paso |
this is beautiful. I know your feelings so well, this was truly great. Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love. |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
This was well written. I liked it alot. Plus it was titled very appropriately. Great job. Hey Kristi... was that guy me? *grinning evilly*  "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
wow! this was beautifully written...i can reallly relate and i love the sentiment... you did a great! job! Regret for things you did maybe tempered by time, regret for things you Didn't do, however, is inconsolable... -------823------- |
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