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Gradually you waste away your life....
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Gradually you waste away your life.... |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
and gradually sleep is the overdose the need of the buried...almost where you die not once but twice the pleasure of existence was never this fanatical about life.. as a deer knows fear in the grasp of headlights so shall you..broken embers your a fallen star you speak with clarity but you'll never get quite that far.. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
jackal: this is certainly intriguing... i really like the "ember" metaphor (even if i dont quite grasp its intended meaning)... well-written and perhaps deeper than my simple mind can fathom... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
Your words struck me. I have truly felt those feelings and thought those thoughts. Very good language. Nicely done! |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
beautiful!!!!! Regret for things you did maybe tempered by time, regret for things you Didn't do, however, is inconsolable... -------823------- |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Interesting. What intrigued you to write this one? "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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