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Save the Child (she's all that matters)
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Save the Child (she's all that matters) |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
The Servent I was walking home from Church on darkened night When I came upon an older man in a bruttle fight Close by sat a small girl with hair of gold Looking up at her daddy who was 'ol so bold She stared on with her bright blue eyes gleaming Looked just like an angel sitting there dreaming The fight broke out of control and into the street Neither man had the slightest notion of defeat The girl sat on the side of the bridge She showed her fathers pain as her face folded in a cringe The man in black reached to his back and pulled a gun This little confrontation was very very close to done They backed away from each other in a fit of rage His face gleamed wild like a monkey breaking from it's cage As the shot rang through the air Who would now be the one to dare? The little girl was the one who stared the barrel in the face The pointless street rage, oh man what a messed up case I shoved this beautiful girl out of the way Well--what else can I say I felt my body go over--I felt myself enter into the deep blue current In a moment I heard God whisper to my ear "Well done thou good and faithful servent" Written by: Hoppy NEW POETRY FORUM NOW OPEN "If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity." SUBMIT YOUR POETRY HERE, AWSOME PAGE. NEW POETRY FORUM ADDED Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. THE PAGE OF PURE POETIC EXPRESSION!! |
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Alina Le Ann Junior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 40INDIANA |
I like this poem...I can't say why....it's just a feeling.....it's great...well written and terribly sad but up-lifting at the same time! Alina LE Ann |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
You pulled off the long lines well....and in doing so added the quote from the Bible. Nice work Hoppy There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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