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since 1999-07-28
Posts 95
Fayetteville, TN USA

0 posted 1999-10-02 11:51 AM

There's no one left to know me
I've cried all the tears till I'm full of
Nothing, I'm empty
A black hole that comsumes all the smiles
Of the yesterdays I spent with you
And only my dreams, my memories of a
Happier time when I was content with the place
I slept in, the feelings that dwelled inside
Now there is a fakeness in my smile,
If you paid any attention you'd see it
You'd worry and ask and care about it
But you are busy, I can't place blame
Cause all the blame's on me
All those insecurities drowned me, drove me
Into this seclusion that no one can enter
No one breaks through my walls, they're all to busy
With their candy rainbow colors
But when their skies turn grey,
When the rain is threatening and the wind
Knocks them down
They'll seek my shelter, my warmth, my light
Shining out from the inside
But there will be locks and chains on my little door
And bars across the windows
I'll leave you like you left me here
But if I want to I could take down the chains
Break the locks and tear off the bars,
And let you in my stone castle
And the damp decayed walls inside of me
Will scare you into believing
My name is no one
My hope all wilted and faded
My blonde spandex lies and empty words of promise
Written on those walls in a language vaguely familiar
To you, can you read the signs
Can you turn back the years, and undo my pain?
Can you understand and endure the rain?

© Copyright 1999 Rhiannon - All Rights Reserved
Paul Hoekman
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382
Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>
1 posted 2000-03-02 10:55 AM

How can it be no one replied to this?
Imagery abounds
BUT you have to leave the castle.
It's not up to others to try and get in
or to think they would want to go in.
Don't look to or expect other people to
be responsible for your happiness.
Technically speaking you should try
to format a little, break it into segments
it would be much easier and enjoyable on the eyes.

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