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its a poem for my mom...i want your opinion
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its a poem for my mom...i want your opinion |
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S3NSATION18 Junior Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 31 |
I'll like you forever I'll love you always Even when I was bad Your feelings never changed I'll like you forever I'll love you always When I made bad choices You helped me understand I'll like you forever I'll love you always Your my mom And you could never be replaced I'll like you forever I'll love you always To me your more than just a mom Your like my best friend I can tell you anything and know... you'll understand You might not like it You might not agree But you tell me it's ok If it makes me happy I'll like you forever I'll love you always Just a lil something i wanted to say. I LOVE YOU MOM !! |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
teriffic poem S3NSATION18! I really liked it! that is exactly how I feel about my mother! i was going to write a poem about her...but I forgot..(oops  )~~Lavada "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate" |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
sensation: i think your mother will love the poem  i like the repeated line best of all of them, but i do feel that it's overused in the poem... you might consider using it at the end of every other line instead of ending every single line with it... just a suggestion...sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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