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since 2000-01-03
Posts 56

0 posted 2000-02-01 05:09 PM

The volition has passed to somewhere
That I can no longer reach
And now the grasp of agitation
Is all the sermons preach

Awoken with no zeal in sight
I take this breath with little hope
Undignified, I’ve lost all respect
These fingers slide across my throat

And to the ones who no longer see
Just what I bleed myself for
What I want is to be taken in
This I wish, and nothing more

 "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh
it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE

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The Haunted Poet
Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37
Sumner Washington
1 posted 2000-02-01 11:58 PM

Nice poem. I used to write like this all the time but you have just blown my poetry away somehow..... dang! Keep it up!
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-02-02 12:19 PM

nights: chillingly beautiful... i love it... the verse and rhyme are pleasing and well thought out... very good job... i commend you  

jerome the boy with no brain

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!

since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
3 posted 2000-02-02 03:35 PM

As always Nights you have done a great job.  Keep up the good work. I'll be looking forward to your next post.
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