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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
Caught off guard You're heart skips a beat The unexpected is shown To unforseen eyes A smile smeared Upon a face so pale, so cold Unthinkable desires of heartache Are brought before Untainted apparitions Shadows of the unwilling Return the favors you've offered Immersed with words And not a single thing to say A blank stare unfolds on What is shown before you Immersed with tears And not a single blink of the eye "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Lovely poem. Very good. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
nights: yet another beautiful piece... hurry up and write something bad so i'll have some substance to my critique  (actually i like it when i dont have to pick something apart)... very solid and meaningful work...sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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